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argylefox

11th Jul 2020, 10:27 AM

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Tiger snek.

lirvilas

11th Jul 2020, 10:31 AM

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come on, Fyre! we're all big goblins here

"A-R-R-O-W-S-P-O-N-G-E"

argylefox

11th Jul 2020, 10:55 AM

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It would have been better to have someone fatter, then.

chris-tar

11th Jul 2020, 11:41 AM

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You should have Kain return as "Darth-Kain", part man, part machine...
I can see him crawling back up the hole now...

argylefox

11th Jul 2020, 2:42 PM

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Strange that you say that...

In an early version this chapter was going to end with an image oh Kain's dead body at the bottom of the pit. Then it would be dragged off screen, with someone saying something like, "Who would throw away such a great body?!" Later, they find a Frankenstein-esque being, who has made Kain into a steampunk abomination with no memory, but he would regain his memory, there would be fighting...

After a while I realised that while the concept may be cool it didn't give anything to the story, so it got cut.

Kain's just dead now. The jerk.

KAM

11th Jul 2020, 7:09 PM

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Sex, drugs, rock & roll...

No wait, I think it had something to do with getting that ring off his neck.

argylefox

12th Jul 2020, 11:26 AM

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Yeah, but Kain was all like, "She's dangerous, don't let her in!" and Smol was just going with the flow at that stage, but still said, "Y'know? I want Fyre to come with," then Fyre came with and Kain was unhappy and no one knew why Smol stood up for Fyre. It was a thing.

KAM

12th Jul 2020, 12:01 PM

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And it turns out I misread her line. Somehow my eye skipped over the "me" that was there & I thought she was wondering why Smol was part of the group. D'oh!

argylefox

12th Jul 2020, 12:26 PM

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I chucked at this. "Why is the main character with us? WHAT DOES HE DO FOR THE PARTY!?"

Microraptor

12th Jul 2020, 12:16 AM

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Because Fyre is hot.

sigpig

12th Jul 2020, 4:20 AM

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groan

So you're saying that Smol is warming to her?

argylefox

12th Jul 2020, 11:26 AM

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Like a Smolatov cocktail?

eekee

18th Aug 2020, 8:49 AM

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I had to laugh out loud at that! I mean.. Smol? An explosive? Smol??? XD

argylefox

22nd Aug 2020, 6:45 PM

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I mean, he'd be a pretty darn small firecracker...

eekee

31st Aug 2020, 7:13 PM

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*snerk* Yes

MadJak91

13th Jul 2020, 3:46 AM

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Tiger Snake! That is really adorable :>

That turned out to be a good decision so maybe little one has good hunches without even knowing it sometimes!
Hey, maybe Kain's death can shake up the bounty hunters a bit...

argylefox

13th Jul 2020, 10:47 AM

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Let's just say you'll find out in the next few pages...